Thursday, March 25, 2010

54 YA

TITLE: Antiversary
GENRE: YA


V-Day, 7 a.m.

The card for Marshall was gone. Totally gone.

I’d searched every conceivable place, even pulled my bed out from against the wall.

16 comments:

  1. Not really hooked, but it might be a personal preference. I just don't have a reason to care.

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  2. The writing is good, and I'm suympthetic to the character. I'd keep reading.

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  3. I'm on the fence, I would a little more, but I'm not completely hooked

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  4. I probably wouldn't read on.

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  5. I think there's a good bit of conflict brewing already. I'd read more.

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  6. Not sure I'm totally hooked, but I would read on. I like the "V-day". Makes me think there's some personality there and things could get interesting.

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  7. Semi-hooked. I might read a little more.

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  8. I would keep reading. I have enough questions I already want answered to read further. :-)

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  9. Could be hooked. I'd read more. We have a mystery here, even though it's just a card. But you could make the second parg active by showing her searching, pulling the bed from against the wall, instead of telling us.

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  10. I'm hooked...I love books that break things down with times and dates...

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  11. HOOKED!
    "V-Day" n' "pulled my bed out from against the wall" sucked me in! N' I LOVE the title! ㋡

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  12. I like the voice, but am not really hooked.

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  13. I love the title and that might get me to give it more of a chance, but the opening doesn't hook me.

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  14. I wouldn't care enough to read on

    I need a little context to want to go on

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