Thursday, March 25, 2010

59 Suspense

TITLE: THE FINAL LIE
GENRE: Suspense



If there was one thing Nathan knew best, it’s that he could make stupid mistakes. This was one of them.

22 comments:

  1. Heh. This made me smile so I guess I'm hooked enough to read a little more.

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  2. Gotta love a guy who KNOWS he makes stupid mistakes. Got me good.

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  3. This one got me too. I'd keep reading...

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  4. I don't usually read suspense, so I'd probably not have picked this one up to start off with. That said, I'm intrigued and would probably keep reading this one.

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  5. Probably would pass.

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  6. It was okay, but I think it could be stronger. Maybe start off with the mistake, showing rather than telling us about it.

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  7. Mildly hooked. It would depend on if the situation pays off.

    I would be more effectively hooked if I had an idea of the situation first and the comment later.

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  8. I liked it. I'd read on to see exactly what was going on.

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  9. Yep. Like that the MC knows himself (at least a little!).

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  10. I am curious to know what the stupid mistake is, so I guess that qalifies as hooked.

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  11. Not hooked. It read YA to me, then I saw it was suspense. It just has a younger feel to it and doesn't feel like suspense.

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  12. Hooked. I liked the stupid mistake, and I'd keep reading to see what it was.

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  13. In one line there is a character I can relate to already. I would keep going.

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  14. Hooked IF there's a payoff. I totally don't mind being told about it (rather than shown), but the payoff is everything. Good luck!

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  15. Hooked! I like it when a character is able to see their own foibles.

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  16. I'm not completely sold, but I like it enough I'd read on.

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  17. I missed this first time through..like it...hooked for sure :)

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  18. This doesn't hook me, but I'd give it a little bit more to see what the current mistake was.

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  19. seemed ho-hum to me

    a guy who knows he makes stupid mistakes not a hook for me

    maybe a guy who doesn't expect to ever make mistakes and then makes a biggy would be more interesting to me...

    If this is suspense I'd not be intersted in a whole book with a guy who's already identified as someone who makes stupid mistakes...I'm not expecting much here if the suspense rides on his stupid mistakes

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