Miss Snark's First Victim
Semi-hooked... I like your first line. :)
Hooked. Almost cliche opening sentence, but still...it grabbed me.(Wordver: Scify...but it's not!)
Like it - would read on. Nice if a little more individual. 'until it was someone you'd loved/hated/stalked' for example.
Semi-hooked. Would probably read on.
The title grabbed me first and the opening sentence grabbed me next. I'd keep reading.
Semi-hooked. Agree that beginning is borderline cliche, but I would keep reading.
Not hooked. I think it would work better for me if the info was reversed. "Det. Seth Banning paused at the bedroom doorway. It was always just another dead body - until it was someone you knew."
I'm on the fence about this one. The title throws me off because of J.D. Robb's highly popular series, the titles which are all "_____ In Death".
LOVED the first line. Grabbed me and told me to get reay for a ride.
hooked. First line does catch the eye. Doesn't let you slide by too quickly.
Almost hooked--I liked the opening, but the second line felt like it would finish with a too-common set up for a crime scene opening (detective/officers examining the body/arriving on the scene/whatever) so it would depend a lot on the voice and actual scene for me to read on.
I liked it. I'd read on.
I'd keep reading. Yes, the first sentence might be somewhat cliched but it did make me wonder who the victim was and how he knew them.
Semi hooked and I like the title.
It felt a little too cliche to me.
Semi-hooked. Decent first line.