Thursday, March 25, 2010

33 Fantasy

TITLE: Penance
GENRE: Fantasy



The blood woke it prematurely.

26 comments:

  1. Heck yeah I'm hooked!! Awesome and only 5 words!!!

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  2. I like this except for the "it".

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  3. You're not alone, Tami. I'm a little interested, but not hooked off the bat.

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  4. Hmm...I think this should have been 25 words (we're not judging first sentences.) Because after 32 entries, I've noticed that a lot can change after the first five.

    As is, I'd give it a few more lines.

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  5. Would read the next sentence to see what it was.

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  6. I'd give it more to find out what "it" was, but I'm not sure I'm hooked yet.

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  7. Not hooked, because the sentence doesn't have meaning without context. Therefore I would be annoyed, though I might read another sentence or two to find out what it means.

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  8. I do not read fantasy..normally..but I liked this sentence and want to know more so I say hooked!

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  9. I like this first sentence. But I'm afraid -- if the next sentence is more than 20 words -- you're going to quickly lose me in purple prose. Prove me wrong! :)

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  10. That's your first "25?" How long is that second sentence?

    'Fraid it's not enough to say anything.

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  11. Not really enough to go on, sorry.

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  12. Maybe hooked, if I had more to go on.

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  13. The 'it' killed the sentence for me.

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  14. Not a lover of fantasy, but...not hooked.

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  15. Nope. I wanted another sentence for context.

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  16. Hooked. To me, the "it" sounds pretty ominous. I'll echo the others who want to see the second sentence, but I like the tone those first five words set.

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  17. Hooked. The "it" clinched it :) So creepy.

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  18. I do like this as an opening line, but I thought the whole point of the exercise was to post a bit more.

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  19. Why didn't you use all 25 words? I'd love to read more

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