Miss Snark's First Victim
Not really hooked. It's clothes and an office chair. I get the feeling it's supposed to be deeper than that, but I'm just not feeling it.
Nothing one way or the other.
Nothing really to hook me in yet.
I love this. I think that it sets up a nice conflict for the character in just a few words -- her traditional/family life and her Chinese roots vs. her working/office life. I like the juxtaposition of the satin and the coarse upholstery, very strong sense impressions right off the bat. Good job.
Feels a bit clunky. Don't really get a feel for voice, it's all caught up in super-specific details.
Not hooked. Can't see a jacket getting caught on upholstery, unless said upholstery is cracked, like an open wound.
My thoughts align with Jodi's. Jacket caught on chair doesn't hook me. I want to know about the main character, not clothing.
I lovelovelove Chinese-American memoir, and love the juxtaposition. Hooked.
The contrast between cultures is here, but I think I need the next sentence to strengthen and frame it for me. I'd say not quite hooked unless the second sentence is very strong.
Thank you all. The next sentence reads "So much for red being a lucky color."
Not hooked. I'm wondering if your MC is Chinese or Chinese American, or if she's Caucasian and just has a sister-in-law who lives in China. Knowing could make the difference for me.
Not really hooked yet. Sorry.
Hooked. At least, I'd read more.
Not hooked, sorry.
I don't read memoirs. I can't say this hooked me and would make me want to read.