Not really hooked. Same as Juli said, I instantly imagine her a whiny, rich girl. I would read on, at least for the next few sentences, to see if it's explained why her father is protecting her.
Semi-hooked here... I like the fact she does not want to be wobbly and cry in front of her protectors.
I imagine the next line shows her stalwartly putting on her game face and carrying on despite the PROBLEM (which I have no doubt would be revealed). :)
My first thought was - not another whiny woman. But it's just a sentence, and it's written well, so I would give it more time. However, I'd chuck the book fast if she continued on that way.
Yikes! This one's mine. Isobel is not a whiny woman at all, so I was surprised to see the comments about that because as the author I have such a different image of her. I think the rest of the first para dispels the image of a crybaby rich girl, but this has been an eye-opener for me.
Hooked. Something more unique than death and mayhem, which is so overdone these days IMO. A frightened femela who doesn't cry and keeps a stiff upper lip. Go girl! See no reason to assume she's a whiner.
Not hooked. A historical romance with a rich girl trying not to cry. I worry that she'd be somewhat weepy the whole time.
ReplyDeleteI like that she's trying to be tough, but not totally hooked.
ReplyDeletenot completely hooked yet, but I would read on because I like the genre
ReplyDeleteI'd give it a few more sentences to tell me what's going on and whether or not her trying not to cry has merit in relation to the situation.
ReplyDeleteI like the genre, but I probably wouldn't read on. This beginning gives the impression she's going to be whiny, so I'd stop right here.
ReplyDeleteNot really hooked. Same as Juli said, I instantly imagine her a whiny, rich girl. I would read on, at least for the next few sentences, to see if it's explained why her father is protecting her.
ReplyDeleteSemi-hooked here... I like the fact she does not want to be wobbly and cry in front of her protectors.
ReplyDeleteI imagine the next line shows her stalwartly putting on her game face and carrying on despite the PROBLEM (which I have no doubt would be revealed). :)
Not sure. This isn't my genre, but I might read a little further to try to get a handle on Isobel
ReplyDeleteThis isn't my genre, but I'm hooked. I want to know why she is under protection and why she's crying.
ReplyDeleteIf the reasons are interesting and not a cliche, I'd settle in and read on.
HOOKED! N' this isn't even a genre I'd normally be interested in!! ㋡
ReplyDeleteMy first thought was - not another whiny woman. But it's just a sentence, and it's written well, so I would give it more time. However, I'd chuck the book fast if she continued on that way.
ReplyDeleteYikes! This one's mine. Isobel is not a whiny woman at all, so I was surprised to see the comments about that because as the author I have such a different image of her. I think the rest of the first para dispels the image of a crybaby rich girl, but this has been an eye-opener for me.
ReplyDeleteThanks for commenting!
Hooked. Something more unique than death and mayhem, which is so overdone these days IMO. A frightened femela who doesn't cry and keeps a stiff upper lip. Go girl! See no reason to assume she's a whiner.
ReplyDeletehooked enough to keep reading. good job!
ReplyDeleteNot hooked.
ReplyDeleteSomehow, the first sentence just doesn't make me care for the character enough.
Love this genre. Am semi-hooked. Like others, would give it a page or two to judge.
ReplyDeleteSort of hooked. I'd need a subtle hint at time and place in the next para and a big reason why she's close to tears to keep reading though.
ReplyDeleteNot quite, it felt like there were too many words, but I might read on a bit more to see what's going on...
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