Thursday, March 25, 2010

23 Contemporary Romance

TITLE: Carey On
GENRE: Contemporary Romance


Jimi Hendrix had a lot of explaining to do. After all, his glowing descriptions of Ladbroke Grove were the reason Katie Scott was in London.

20 comments:

  1. I'm hooked, but I'd remove "Ladbroke Grove" as it's tough to take in three full names in two sentences.

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  2. It's a Fantastic story but then I'm biased I was a beta reader. Love it!

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  3. I love the first sentence. I'd keep reading and hope the voice held up.

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  4. I like the voice. I'd read on.

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  5. The first sentence grabbed me. This isn't my usual genre, but I'd keep going.

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  6. LOVED this opening! Totally hooked.

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  7. It didn't do anything for me.
    Too many proper names in too short a space, I think.

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  8. I laughed at these lines. I'm hooked!

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  9. Great hook! Has me curious...

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  10. Hooked. This made me chuckle.

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  11. Ladbroke Grove is a mouthful but such a great British mouthful! Love it. Love it. I don't think I've ever seen the beginning. Woot! Seriously I'm hooked even without knowing what's coming.

    If you are worried about the 3 proper names- I say leave off Scott.

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  12. I like it - but then I love Jimmi Hendrix.

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  13. Almost hooked--I like the voice and would read on a bit to see what's going on.

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