Ladbroke Grove is a mouthful but such a great British mouthful! Love it. Love it. I don't think I've ever seen the beginning. Woot! Seriously I'm hooked even without knowing what's coming.
If you are worried about the 3 proper names- I say leave off Scott.
I'm hooked, but I'd remove "Ladbroke Grove" as it's tough to take in three full names in two sentences.
ReplyDeleteHooked...
ReplyDeleteIt's a Fantastic story but then I'm biased I was a beta reader. Love it!
ReplyDeleteI love the first sentence. I'd keep reading and hope the voice held up.
ReplyDeleteHooked.
ReplyDeleteI like the voice. I'd read on.
ReplyDeleteThe first sentence grabbed me. This isn't my usual genre, but I'd keep going.
ReplyDeleteI liked this one. Made me smile.
ReplyDeleteLOVED this opening! Totally hooked.
ReplyDeleteYes, hooked<:
ReplyDeleteI would keep reading.
ReplyDeleteIt didn't do anything for me.
ReplyDeleteToo many proper names in too short a space, I think.
hooked!
ReplyDeleteI laughed at these lines. I'm hooked!
ReplyDeleteGreat hook! Has me curious...
ReplyDeleteHooked. This made me chuckle.
ReplyDeleteI'd read more.
ReplyDeleteLadbroke Grove is a mouthful but such a great British mouthful! Love it. Love it. I don't think I've ever seen the beginning. Woot! Seriously I'm hooked even without knowing what's coming.
ReplyDeleteIf you are worried about the 3 proper names- I say leave off Scott.
I like it - but then I love Jimmi Hendrix.
ReplyDeleteAlmost hooked--I like the voice and would read on a bit to see what's going on.
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