Miss Snark's First Victim
Yes, I would read on. I think that first sentence is great.
I think so.
I'd give it a read.
Beautifully written. Hooked.
I'd read on
I would keep reading...
Excellent mental picture. Hooked
Good hook :)
I would definitely keep reading.
hooked enough to definitely keep reading.
Hooked. Great imagery there.
Love the first sentence. I'd keep reading.
I love the killing of mother followed by choking buds - I'd keep reading. :-)
I don't know. I wasn't hooked. If it was literary fiction, I think I'd buy the imagery, but for a suspense novel, I can't imagine that this would be what the MC remembers, as opposed to the murder itself or what led up to it.But you've hooked everyone else, so that says you have something here.
I love this. The imagery and your word choice both hooked me.
Sorry, not hooked. There's something inconsistent about it. It doesn't ring true for me. Perhaps I can't imagine a protagonist focusing on frost and perfect petals. Fortunately, I'm not a majority opinion.
Three generations in one sentence. Great. I'd read more.
Not really hooked, sorry.
Intrigued, but not really hooked. The dad killing the mom is a good hook, but then it slows down with the roses. I might give it a couple more sentences, but I'd need something more soon.
i'm one of the odd ones out tooperhaps build a suspenseful picture by opening with the flowers if they're important to the story and leading into that it was the night mother died